I have been challenged – bum bum – by the talented Paige Addams. If you’ve never read her work, then you should – in fact you can read an excerpt in her challenge post, or chapters on her blog, too.
Here are the rules:
- ~ Search your manuscript for the word “look,” and then copy the surrounding paragraphs into a post.
- ~ Give a little background on the scene if you’d like.
- ~ Tag 5 other writers who’re working on, or who’ve completed a manuscript.
5 Writers I’m Tagging:
- Juli Hoffman
- Donna Yates
- Barbara Tarn
- Reena Jacobs
Now for my “look”
Hmmm. I found a lot of instances of the word “look” – wonder if that is normal or if I just use it more than usual? But, I went with the second scene I found as it is short
This is from book 5 Heart of the Raven, which is in progress. I don’t think this needs much set up, but know it’s unedited
Katelina dropped onto the wooden bench and stretched her legs out in front of her. A pair of vampires walked past and, as their eyes swept over her she suddenly wasn’t sure that sending Neil away had been such a good idea.
The pair moved on and she relaxed. She was just being paranoid. They wouldn’t really do anything to her in the middle of the mall.
“What’s a little human doing all on her own?”
Katelina jolted. The voice in her head wasn’t hers ,which meant there was a powerful vampire lurking around.
“Powerful? I’m flattered.”
Katelina snatched up her shopping bag and hugged it to her like a shield. She told herself to stay calm. Neil would be back any moment and then-
“But where will you be?”
“Not here.” Katelina jerked to her feet and spun towards the exit. A broad shouldered vampire in a green coat suddenly blocked her path. She didn’t recognize the bearded face or the dark shaggy hair, but the look in his eyes was familiar and hungry.
She swung the shopping bag in a panicked arc and jumped away. The vampire dodged easily and grabbed her wrist. He jerked her towards him and pushed his face close to hers, staring deep into her eyes. She struggled to look away from the green orbs but she couldn’t. Her resistance melted into a pool of nothing and the sounds of the mall faded. She was trapped in the center of a glittering emerald green prism, and she didn’t even care.
The voice seemed to come from both outside and inside her head at the same time. “Isn’t that better? Now let’s go back to my room and discuss how powerful I am.”
She didn’t notice the bag that slipped from her fingers, or the room that moved past as her legs mechanically followed his lead. The only thing she was aware of was a steady thrumming in her head that grew louder and louder by the second. It vibrated the false green walls of her mental prison and rolled through her.
The thrumming turned into words, murmurs, thoughts. His thoughts. He was bored. It was just a bit of fun and why not? He deserved some fun. “Don’t we all deserve some fun?”
And as a bonus, here’s a little music to go with the theme….
Someone had to do it
P.S. Roxette Rules!!