Six Sentence Sunday

It’s time again for Six Sentence Sunday, the weekly blog event where participants post six sentences of something they’ve written, whether published, a work in progress, or something they may never finish.

This week’s six sentences come from Ashton, a short story that will shortly be on Smashwords as the fourth in the Vampire Morsel’s Collection

The screen door banged open and closed, and feet shuffled through the house.Β  Ashton peered around the others curiously as someone whimpered; a soft, high sound, and then two of the guys appeared through the doorway, lugging a fourteen year old girl between them. Her hair was strawberry red and hung around her face like it had just fallen out of a ponytail. Her clothes were rumpled and dirt stained, and she had only one shoe. Tears and dirt streaked her face, and traces of blood were smeared under her nose. It would have been bad enough if Ashton hadn’t known who she was, but knowing made it worse.

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  1. Fantastic six and leaves me wanting to know who the girl is?

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  2. Tell me about it. I’ve got my full out for final edits before I do my last read through the upload it. Looks like May’s going to be busy for us both.

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  3. Great description – could see this very clearly. I wonder who the girl is?

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  4. and I forgot who the girl is πŸ˜€ guess I have to review

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  5. Taryn Kincaid

     /  May 1, 2011

    Yep. Can definitely see how knowing the girl might make things worse!

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  6. Great snippet!

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  7. Totally intriguing and left me wanting to know much more!

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  8. Powerful six! Now I want to know who the girl is. AND what happens next!

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  9. wonderful description. I want to know who she is and what happened.

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  10. I want to read more right now.

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  11. Powerful six with a great hook.

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  12. Oh no! And who is she? Definitely makes me want more.

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  13. Good six; descriptions tell everything.

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  14. Great description. Scary.

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  15. I remember this one. And what an ending! I cringe just thinking about it. *shivers*

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  16. uh oh. Love the conflict here.

    Well done.

    Best,
    Allure Van Sanz

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  17. The knowing can make things bad. I can feel this because I know a lot of stuff.

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    • Yeah, I know lot’s of stuff, too. Like what is going to be in your next parcel :p No one knows when I will get unlazy enough to mail it, though!

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