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I am in the rewriting/rereading stage of Heart of the Raven and have added some new scenes. Of course, whenever I do that bits get deleted. Most of the time it’s just a few sentences and I can work the good ones in after a fashion, but I had to cut a chunk  between Micah and Katelina that just won’t fit anymore. However Micah is convinced that since he’s so clever (his words, not mine) that it’s worth sharing. We’ll see if you agree.

Micah spied Katelina suddenly and spun towards her. “Lunch! Where the fuck is that fruity prick?”

“I don’t know.”

He stormed towards her, shaking his fist. “You better not be protecting that son of a bitch after what he did to Loren!”

She was irritated enough and that did it. “Fuck you, Micah. The last time I saw him he was in Thadimus’ office trying to get his money back.”

Micah came to a stop and towered over her. “You knew he was here and didn’t fucking tell me?”

“Sorry, I had other things on my mind!”

“Maybe I should sign up to join the list of people you’re fucking so you’d remember!”

She punched him in the stomach and he flinched backwards in surprise. “I’m not fucking a list of people, you ass! And even if I was, you’d never be on it!”

He recovered with a snicker. “Of course not, Princess, I’ve got better taste.” He turned away and stormed towards the nearest building.

So now I have to ask: was Micah right? Was this cut scene worth the time it took me to post it? Or should it have just stayed in the dustbin?signature for white

And if you’re dying for more Heart of the Raven action, you can read the first unfinalized chapter via Vicki Hudson’s First Look  as well as the first chapters of other WIPS!

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  1. Interesting bit, but without context…I don’t know. A little extreme if they’re just hanging out at Walmart, 😉 but I could see this working if the rest of the chapter were dramatic.

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  2. I still have stuff for you but today major plumbing problem. If it’s not one thing it’s another

    Here is the dish for K to eat Kushari

    http://listverse.com/2011/10/28/top-10-delicious-and-unique-egyptian-foods/

    I had it for lunch but not impressed

    Micah spied Katelina suddenly and spun – spun suddently?

    Why not leave it in?

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    • TY! That looks like something poor K can look sad about 😉

      Well, in the rewrite Micah finds who he is looking for, so he doesn’t need to ask her,LOL!

      Oh man! Plumbing?? and you just got home!!

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      • Been home bit over a week. Still tired. I have more stuff for you but not now – going to bed

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  3. Jen g

     /  January 23, 2013

    Totally worth posting!!! Loved it!!!

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  4. Keep it. I blushed at all the rude words being English and prudy, but you should definitely leave it in.

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  5. I don’t know, Jo. I love all of the characters and their scenes. But I do love Micah’s comeback.

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    • He’s really proud of it and sad he didn’t get to use it. i managed to sort of get the same general feel elsewhere but it lacks his “better taste” remark, LOL!

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  6. Knowing he finds out without asking her, I say delete it. Just my two cents. 😀

    That hamster is addicting. I keep feeding it. hehe

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