#FirstLineFriday – William

FLFIt’s time for #FirstLineFriday! On Friday, authors post the first one or first two lines of a potential work, a work-in-progress, or a published work  on their blog, and title the post #FirstLineFriday (just like this). It’s  a lot of fun, so feel free to join in! You can share your link on my blog comments, or on Rami Ungar’s (the brains behind FLF).

Today’s first line comes from the short story William, part of the Thirteen Guests collection.

William stood at the foot of the bed, phone held to his ear by a shoulder. A suitcase yawned in front of him, half packed, as he nodded along to his words. “Yes…Of course…I’ll see you there.”

This is actually three, but it needs the quote to make any sense about what words he’s nodding to.

What do you think? What’s your first line for the week?

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  1. “as he nodded along to his words” feels a little awkward. I’d rewrite the sentence and put it after the dialogue, though that’s just me.

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