#FirstLineFriday – Ren

FLFIt’s time for #FirstLineFriday! On Friday, authors post the first one or first two lines of a potential work, a work-in-progress, or a published work  on their blog, and title the post #FirstLineFriday (just like this). It’s  a lot of fun, so feel free to join in! You can share your link on my blog comments, or on Rami Ungar’s (the brains behind FLF).

Today’s first line comes from the short story Ren, part of the Thirteen Guests collection.

Ren turned off the shower and stepped out of the tub. The steam on the mirror reminded him of fog. Without contrast, his snow colored hair and skin were lost in it.

What do you think? What’s your first line for the week?

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2 Comments

  1. Third sentence feels a little weird. Maybe shorten it to, “His pale hair and skin were lost in it.” I think people will get it.

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