The Great Synopsis Debate

gon-reveal-comingIt’s time once again to write the dreaded synopsis for the newest book (bah!) So I’ve taken a whack at it and here are the two version (There’s a difference of a sentence)

#1)

A war four-thousand years in the making.

In the mists of time, Lilith sealed her immortal lover away. Awakened, Samael has only one plan: revenge.

Linked to Samael and caught in the middle, Katelina watched as Lilith took both her best friend Sarah and a child vampire hostage. Now, it’s up to her and Jorick to get them back. Joined by a group more foe than friend, they search for the ancient vampiress, never dreaming the fight will come to them.

Unleashing horrific attacks, Lilith leaves Katelina’s hometown in ruins and her mother in a coma. Sightings indicate that Sarah may have escaped, but where is she? Should Katelina leave her mother’s side to search for her friend?  And what will happen when Samael catches the scent of Lilith’s trail?

The final installment of the Amaranthine series raises the stakes. No longer the cringing, terrified woman she was, Katelina will have to step up or lose everything she’s ever cared about.

 

#2)

A war four-thousand years in the making.

In the mists of time, Lilith sealed her immortal lover away. Awakened, Samael has only one plan: revenge.

Linked to Samael and caught in the middle, Katelina watched as Lilith took both her best friend Sarah and a child vampire hostage. Now, it’s up to her and Jorick to get them back. Joined by a group more foe than friend, they search for the ancient vampiress, never dreaming the fight will come to them.

Unleashing horrific attacks, Lilith leaves Katelina’s hometown in ruins and her mother in a coma. Should Katelina leave her mother’s side to search for her friend?  And what will happen when Samael catches the scent of Lilith’s trail?

The final installment of the Amaranthine series raises the stakes. No longer the cringing, terrified woman she was, Katelina will have to step up or lose everything she’s ever cared about.

 

*****

What do you think? Which one do you like better? Do you even like it at all?

 

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8 Comments

  1. I prefer the 1st Jo …the 3rd paragraph offers a further peice of intrique regarding Sarah.
    Good luck in your decision!!

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  2. Jennifer

     /  March 11, 2017

    I think the first is good. I can’t wait read it!

    Reply
  3. I favour the second. It’s a little more concise without losing any of the plot.

    Reply
  4. #1 – the extra sentence spaces better “Lilith leaves Katelina’s hometown” and “Should Katelina leave her mother’s side” (two instances of “leave” too close without that extra sentence)! 😉

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  5. Penny Shortt

     /  March 12, 2017

    I like both mostly, but I think saying her hometown is in shambles or her mother is comatose may be revealing too much.

    Reply
  6. I favor the second. Can’t wait to get my hands on this book!

    Reply

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