From the Cutting Room Floor

I’m editing Clash of Legends and as I go things get cut. Here’s the first major chunk to get removed. There’s no spoilers, but there IS adult language.

After several minutes of driving over what felt like boulders, the truck pulled to a stop.

Micah threw his cards on the floor and stood. “I’m gonna go find out what the fuck is going on.”

He threw back the cover and hopped out of the truck. Katelina only hesitated a second before she followed him.

They’d been right about the terrain; instead of a road they were on a snowy, rocky patch of ground. She could hear the sound of a car in the distance, probably the highway they should have been on.

She rounded the truck as Micah threw opened the driver’s door. “What the hell?”

Oren looked up from the map spread over the steering wheel. “I have enough to deal with without your interference!”

Katelina came to a stop behind the bald vampire and looked past Torina’s angry face to Jorick’s. “What’s going on?”

“We’re lost,” Torina said angrily. “I told him we needed to turn left.”

“Shut up!” Oren shouted. He grabbed the map and waved it around. “Even if I could speak Chinese this thing wouldn’t make any sense! This says there is a road right here, but do you see a road? Do you? No!”

Micah jerked the map from his hands and studied it. “Is this where we’re supposed to be?” He jabbed an airplane symbol on the map

“No! That’s on the other side of China!” Oren jerked the map out of his hands.

“Well excuse me all to hell mister sunshine! Why don’t we just fucking turn around?”

“Obviously we’re going to have to,” Torina said. “And then turn Left.”

“Fine,” Oren snapped and ground the truck into gear. “Get back in the truck or stay behind.”

A bit of fun but it serves no plot purpose. Now back to chopping!

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I am in the rewriting/rereading stage of Heart of the Raven and have added some new scenes. Of course, whenever I do that bits get deleted. Most of the time it’s just a few sentences and I can work the good ones in after a fashion, but I had to cut a chunk  between Micah and Katelina that just won’t fit anymore. However Micah is convinced that since he’s so clever (his words, not mine) that it’s worth sharing. We’ll see if you agree.

Micah spied Katelina suddenly and spun towards her. “Lunch! Where the fuck is that fruity prick?”

“I don’t know.”

He stormed towards her, shaking his fist. “You better not be protecting that son of a bitch after what he did to Loren!”

She was irritated enough and that did it. “Fuck you, Micah. The last time I saw him he was in Thadimus’ office trying to get his money back.”

Micah came to a stop and towered over her. “You knew he was here and didn’t fucking tell me?”

“Sorry, I had other things on my mind!”

“Maybe I should sign up to join the list of people you’re fucking so you’d remember!”

She punched him in the stomach and he flinched backwards in surprise. “I’m not fucking a list of people, you ass! And even if I was, you’d never be on it!”

He recovered with a snicker. “Of course not, Princess, I’ve got better taste.” He turned away and stormed towards the nearest building.

So now I have to ask: was Micah right? Was this cut scene worth the time it took me to post it? Or should it have just stayed in the dustbin?signature for white

And if you’re dying for more Heart of the Raven action, you can read the first unfinalized chapter via Vicki Hudson’s First Look  as well as the first chapters of other WIPS!

Poll: Legacy of Ghosts Director’s Cut

Last year as part of my promotion for Legacy of Ghosts I posted six “Lost Chapters” or “Deleted Scenes”. These weren’t really deleted scenes, but rather snips I wrote later for the purpose of promotion. Though there is no “necessary” information in them, they are amusing after a fashion, and someone asked me if I was planning to release a “Director’s Cut” of the book with those six scenes “put back in”.

If I did this, I think what i would do is create a webpage with a question that only someone who had read the book would know the answer to, and a correct answer would give you a download code to get a free copy of the Director’s Cut because there’s no point in someone who has already purchased the book having to buy another version just for kicks.  I couldn’t price it as a flat out free because I know if I were looking to buy a book and saw the original version for 2$ or the expanded version for free I’d pick the freebie version – more for less and all that.

But, the question is, is it worth the effort of plugging them in, uploading it to Smashwords (only) and having hubby make the question webpage?

Lost Chapters 3: Ask and Ye Shall Receive

Why should DVDs get all the fun? now presenting the deleted scenes* from Legacy of Ghosts! In other words, The Lost Chapters. – click the link for more info.

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Of course, since these are little snips, you don’t need to have read Legacy of Ghosts to enjoy them.

(Insert this in the middle of Chapter Five, on the way to the roses.)

Katelina glared into the unfamiliar darkness of the motel room. She was annoyed with the situation, annoyed with Jorick, and even annoyed with Loren. How could he be so enthusiastic about it all? But there were a lot of unanswered questions about him.

Jorick stirred next to her and murmured quietly, “You should get some sleep, Katelina.”

She agreed, but instead of taking the advice asked suddenly, “So how does Loren get away with it?”

Jorick half turned in bed to stare at her curiously. “Get away with what?”

“With being a vampire. I mean, he looks like a teenager, right? Don’t the locals notice he doesn’t ever grow up? How does he get out of going to school? And you know, that chick he was dating? I mean she was a teenager, but he’s really, what? My age or older, I imagine. Think about that age difference!”

Jorick cleared his throat noisily to stop the flow of random thoughts. “I don’t know. He just doesn’t go, and I’d have to figure up how old he was, which I don’t care enough to do.”

Not to be deterred, she demanded, “But he is from around there, right? And no one notices?”

Jorick gave a resigned sigh and rolled over to fully face her. “Yes, he’s from ‘around there’. He and his brother both were.”

“And where are his parents?” She paused, and then gave vent to her own private theory, “He didn’t, you know, suck them dry?”

Jorick’s eyebrows shot up with outraged offence. “Suck them dry?” he demanded. “Suck them dry? That’s a lovely phrase!”

She brushed off his overreaction. “Well, did he?”

“Not that I know of.” Jorick glared at her . “The next time you’re eating I should say you’ve mashed your food to death, right?”

“It’s already dead,” she pointed out, then switched back to her original topic. “So, what happened to them, then?”

He sniffed disdainfully. “They died. They were mashed to death.”

She couldn’t stop from rolling her eyes. “Very funny. What really happened to them?”

“A car wreck, I believe. I don’t know. It isn’t as though Loren and I sit around the fire trading stories of our lives! If you want to know, then ask him. I’m sure he’ll be more than happy to tell you.”

She turned the idea over uncomfortably. “No,” she answered slowly. “It would be rude to just point blank ask.”

Jorick seemed surprised. “Why?”

She fidgeted with the hem on the bedspread. “Because…. It is. If he wanted me to know, he’d tell me, himself.”

Jorick pondered the idea a moment. “Assuming he knew you were interested. I doubt it’s occurred to him that you care.”

“Oh, I don’t care,” she said quickly.  “I’m just, you know, kind of curious.”

“Well, be kind of curious tomorrow and ask him.” Jorick yawned pointedly and then rolled onto his back. “For now, I’m rather tired, and we have a potentially long day ahead of us tomorrow.”

“Yeah, I suppose,” Katelina murmured with no conviction. Somewhere the mood of the whole conversation had changed, as had the real topic. The letters popped into her mind and she wondered if Jorick would have the same “just ask” policy about those?

Somehow, she doubted it.

*However, unlike deleted scenes, these were actually written later, for fun, so I could pull off the whole “Lost Chapters” gag. None of the Lost Chapters were ever in the original manuscript, nor were they ever deleted. Thank you for reading the small print.
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